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Audition for ~FanArtPoodleAfro's :iconnightmaretournament2:

This ones a heck of a lot shorter than my previous entries, 1) Because I was experimenting with a new way of doing things (and my god I love how it came out) 2) It was in colour so it took longer 3) I was working on other things alongside it which took priority, therefore its short, the stories a little rushed and overall pretty mediocre but I'm happy with the result. I seriously hope I get into this because Linu's had such a poor record so far, I'd be happy even if I only lasted a single round...

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Linu + Ex (c) ~TotalObelisk

Nightmare (c) ~FanArtPoodleAfro

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Aw, poor Linu T.T I feel bad for her. I wonder if her already unstable condition is going to deteriorate as a result of this all XD Very awesome!
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TotalObelisk Aug 27, 2010  Student Digital Artist
Oh I'm sure the psychological torment she's bound to endure in the forthcoming tournament will have no negative effects on her already delicate psyche :iconteheplz:
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Pandachu Aug 17, 2010  Student Filmographer
I'll just make comments while I'm reading:

Impression1: Sweet, I always enjoy your covers and writing, so this is great. It feels a little heavy on the right, though, because you colored both girls, so it would have been better to have something on the left, or have Ex in the middle with Linu.
Impression2:OH MY BACON IT'S IN FULL COLOR WITH SHADIIIING! :la:
Impression3: Your sound effects always give such great motion in the pictures. <3
Impression4:OHLORDYIT'SGANONDORF-I mean, nice pacing! c: (The panel flow is a tad off, mind the borders)
Impression5: I like your direction, especially in the last panel, it's good storytelling to keep the picture moving like that.
Impression6: The panel and bubble flow is a tad confusing here. See, usually if you have two small panels stacked, the eye follows down rather than across to the big panel on the left. I think you should have just made the second panel wide horizontally since there's a smaller panel within it, and then put panels three and four under it.
Impression7: You were trying to keep the panels interesting, but you did a direction flip. See, in sequential, try to keep figures on the same side as they are, even from behind or another side. Ex is supposedly on the right side of the conversation, so try to keep her there.
Impression8: Again, the borders here suggest reading from top to bottom in two different rows. I read it the correct way afterwards, but it was still a bit confusing. WHAT'S GOING TO HAPPEN OH LINNNUUUUU! :noes:
Impression9: SWEET SHADOW EFFECT! :dummy: Also, I'm glad you're not afraid to do things like, draw people looking down. It's great motion to see. AND I LIKE THAT CONTINUATION OF SOUND EFFECT WOOP!
Impression10: Is it bad that I laughed at Linu because her expression is so perfect?
Impression11: I'M READY MAN, BRING ON THE AWESOME! :la: I love the warped room panel there. it has such great flow.

OKAY I'M DONE TALKING YOUR EAR OFF. GOOD LUCK GETTING IN, THOUGH I DON'T THINK YOU'LL NEED IT THIS IS SO ACE.
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TotalObelisk Aug 17, 2010  Student Digital Artist
Wow...Thanks for such an in depth comment ><...

Haha, a lot of experimentation went on in here, so I'm not really surprised you might've found osome of it confusing, but for the most part I'm happy with the way it turned out...


FFF...Thank you, I'm hoping I can finally get Linu into something ><
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Pandachu Aug 17, 2010  Student Filmographer
You're welcome. I basically just looked at all the pages and spouted out nonsense.

Hahaha, as you should be! Looks like a lot of work went in there.

You're welcome! Linu will get in, have confidence! ♥
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Wow, I'm seeing lots of improvement. I'm jealous of the fact you can keep on churning these out. nice work
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CrazyBatLady Aug 17, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Man, this is awesome! I really like how you did on the colouring, especially the lighting and shading on all the characters. The cover... I don't know, I just find it incredibly cool XD

Good luck, here's hoping you get in! *waves support banner*
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TotalObelisk Aug 17, 2010  Student Digital Artist
I wanted to try something that would go well with the of of dark, nightmarey feel of the whole plot, and I think it worked perfectly..

I also had fun doing all the weird sh*t throughout this one :iconteheplz:

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CrazyBatLady Aug 17, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
So do I, my friend :D

Wierd s*it is fun indeed. I don't do it nearly as much as I should.

:iconcheerplz:
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Clock-workable Aug 17, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Yeah total, do you enjoy stalking little children? XD good luck
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